Dis-Functional

Under Construction Please Help Us Out With Ideas And What Not
 
HomePortalCalendarGalleryFAQSearchMemberlistUsergroupsRegisterLog in
We need people to get on this forum or it will die and we dont want that to happen again!.....so how about we all just be active and invite people to join!!!!! Your lovely admins
Navigation
 Portal
 Index
 Memberlist
 Profile
 FAQ
 Search
Search
 
 

Display results as :
 
Rechercher Advanced Search
Latest topics
» Guess whos back!!
Fri Dec 18, 2009 6:02 pm by The Reaper

» Something im starting to write....a work in progress and yes ik it needs work
Fri Dec 11, 2009 9:58 pm by The Disfunctional One

» "that was....but wait.....did that just....really now?"
Fri Dec 11, 2009 9:06 pm by The Disfunctional One

» ~Screeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee~
Thu Dec 10, 2009 5:57 pm by The Disfunctional One

» boy trouble at the max
Fri Nov 27, 2009 9:58 am by The Reaper

» Would You Rather
Thu Nov 19, 2009 5:16 pm by The Disfunctional One

» Story thread!
Thu Nov 19, 2009 1:55 pm by The Disfunctional One

» Ranting corner
Thu Nov 19, 2009 1:53 pm by The Disfunctional One

» Those silly classics
Tue Nov 10, 2009 5:36 pm by The Disfunctional One

Who is online?
In total there is 1 user online :: 0 Registered, 0 Hidden and 1 Guest

None

Most users ever online was 7 on Sun May 06, 2018 7:21 am
December 2018
MonTueWedThuFriSatSun
     12
3456789
10111213141516
17181920212223
24252627282930
31      
CalendarCalendar

Share | 
 

 This is just something I wrote let me know what you Guys think!

Go down 
AuthorMessage
darkangel13
Frequent-er
Frequent-er
avatar

Posts : 232
Join date : 2009-10-12
Age : 26
Location : the rotting hell that crumbles around me

PostSubject: This is just something I wrote let me know what you Guys think!   Tue Oct 20, 2009 7:08 pm

The years have flown by
So much has changed
It never will be the same again

We throw up our caps
We scream and we shout
We never will be here again

And what does the future hold?
What does the next day bring?
What does this all mean?
What will we all do...?
We'll never be here again

The days just keep rollin'
The time just keeps flowin'
It never will be today again

We all say goodbye
We all say farewell
None of us cry, but we'll never be all near again

And what does the future hold?
What does this next day bring?
What does this all mean?
What will we all do...?
We'll never be here again

So long
Farewell
See you another day
See you another way
See you... maybe...

So what does this all mean?
What will we all do...?
What will the future bring?
Since I'll never see you again....
Back to top Go down
View user profile http://www.myspace.com/sophiex333
The Reaper
Admin
Admin
avatar

Posts : 144
Join date : 2009-10-01
Location : behind you

PostSubject: Re: This is just something I wrote let me know what you Guys think!   Tue Oct 20, 2009 7:13 pm

it is good, gets the point across. some parts sound a little awkward but overall it is a good piece.

_________________
Walk with me, where the Angels fear to tread
Back to top Go down
View user profile
The Disfunctional One
Admin
Admin
avatar

Posts : 305
Join date : 2009-10-01
Age : 2017
Location : In The United States Of America

PostSubject: Re: This is just something I wrote let me know what you Guys think!   Fri Oct 23, 2009 9:07 pm

i like it but the 6th one how its 2 short than 1 long makes it seem weird so in my honest opinion change it to make all short or all long lol

_________________
Little cuts. That's all it asks. Patience. And a steady hand is all it needs.
Back to top Go down
View user profile http://dis-functional.darkbb.com
darkangel13
Frequent-er
Frequent-er
avatar

Posts : 232
Join date : 2009-10-12
Age : 26
Location : the rotting hell that crumbles around me

PostSubject: Re: This is just something I wrote let me know what you Guys think!   Sat Oct 24, 2009 10:10 am

thanks you too!
Back to top Go down
View user profile http://www.myspace.com/sophiex333
The Disfunctional One
Admin
Admin
avatar

Posts : 305
Join date : 2009-10-01
Age : 2017
Location : In The United States Of America

PostSubject: Re: This is just something I wrote let me know what you Guys think!   Sat Oct 24, 2009 2:41 pm

no problamm

_________________
Little cuts. That's all it asks. Patience. And a steady hand is all it needs.
Back to top Go down
View user profile http://dis-functional.darkbb.com
Sponsored content




PostSubject: Re: This is just something I wrote let me know what you Guys think!   

Back to top Go down
 
This is just something I wrote let me know what you Guys think!
Back to top 
Page 1 of 1
 Similar topics
-
» Doctor Who Comic Relief 2011 sketch confirmed
» Phantom of Manhattan (spoilers)
» In the Words of Aretha Franklin: "Oh! Happy Day!" 1952 Cox "Space Bug" !
» Kaze no Stigma Discussion
» Senki Zesshou Symphogear discussion

Permissions in this forum:You cannot reply to topics in this forum
Dis-Functional :: The General Corner :: The Chat Room-
Jump to: